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The diagram below shows how a simple water filter is constructed to produce clean drinking water. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.

The diagram below shows how a simple water filter is constructed to produce clean drinking water. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.
THE GIVEN PROCESS DEPICTS
THAT
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HOW IMPURE
WATER
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 IS FILTERED BY
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WATER
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A WATER
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 FILTER. FOR AN OVERVIEW, AT A GLANCE, IT IS TO BE
NOTEDT
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NOTED
 THAT THE PROCESS INVOLVES FOUR STAGES. IT STARTS
FORM
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FROM
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 INPURED
WATER
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 IS POURED IN
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TANK
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THE TANK
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 AND ENDS WITH PURIFIED
WATER
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 IS STORED IN
STORAGE
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THE STORAGE
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TANK
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. LOOKING AT THE
WATER
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 FILTER CONSTRUCTION IN DETAIL, INPURED
WATER
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 IS POURED IN A
TANK
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. IN THAT
TANK
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AT
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, AT
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FIRST
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FIRST,
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 THE
WATER
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 IS SOCKED BY THE
SAND
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sand. Here
HERE
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HERE,
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 SOME PARTICALES ARE STOPPED BY THE SAND, AND THAN THE
WATER
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 IS GRADUALLY PASSED THROUGH THE
CHARCOAL
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CHARCOAL,
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 WHERE
LOT
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a LOT
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 OF INPURITES ARE FILTERED BY THAT. AFTER
THAT
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THAT,
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 THE
REAMINING
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REMAINING
WATER
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 IS STORED IN
GRAVEL
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GRAVEL.
 HERE
THE
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, THE
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WATER
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PURAFICATION
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PURIFICATION
 IS COMPLETED. IN THE
FOURT
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FOURTH
 STAGE, THE
WATER
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 WHICH ARE STORED IN THE GRAVEL ARE SENT TO
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THE STOREGE
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STOREGE
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STORAGE
TANK
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 BY THE HORSE PIPE.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, tank with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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