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Band 2.5

The government should invest more money in teaching science than in other subjects for a country development and progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

I totally agree
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that
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 should invest more money in teaching
science
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 than in other
subjects
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 at school. To support my opinion,
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, giving more money to
subjects
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relate
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related
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 to
science
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 could help
developing
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 new technologies, contribute
getting
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 a better
heath
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health
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 and good jobs in the future.
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, with the money invested, schools can improve their laboratories, books, materials, tools and offer a better salary to the teachers to work
hardly
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 to drive students forward by new discoveries synonymous
of
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 success and progress.
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, in order to focus on
science
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subjects
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, schools can establish a curriculum which allows most of the
subjects
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work
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to work
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 around a topic, a general research question or a project
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, remaining
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remaining
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maintaining
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 a relationship between the knowledge from the different
subjects
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 to achieve that goal
purposed
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apply
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.
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,
this
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 situation demands
a
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apply
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consistent teamwork to achieve the challenges that
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 kind of
tasks
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represent
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 in education. In
this
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 way, students could learn different topics from the
subjects
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 of the curriculum and keep developing their other skills. In conclusion, increasing the investment from the government in teaching
science
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 could contribute to
develop
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developing
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 innovations in technology and industry fields that help to build better
life
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 conditions for everyone.

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grammar
Use clear and short sentences. Fix small mistakes in spelling and grammar to make your point easy to read.
organization
Start each paragraph with a main idea. Keep a simple link to the next idea.
lexical
Choose words you know well. Use basic and common words to tell your view.
strength
Clear view on the topic.
strength
Ideas are on topic and useful to show your point.
strength
You used linking words like 'Secondly' and 'However'.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • science
  • invest
  • government
  • country
  • progress
  • development
  • economy
  • jobs
  • skills
  • education
  • school
  • subject
  • balance
  • money
  • fund
  • policy
  • funding
  • technology
  • research
  • teacher
  • lab
  • access
  • equality
  • growth
  • culture
  • creativity
  • health
  • industry
  • innovation
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