The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
The chart bar above shows the variety in percentage of
rentad
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rented
and owned households in
england
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England
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and
wales
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Wales
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in
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between the years 1918-2011.
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, we can clearly notice that there’s a rapid change in the type of occupied accommodations that had control in the market. From
1918
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1918,
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rental spaces had the highest average
of
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percentage, and from 1971-
2011
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2011,
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the numbers have changed for owned rooms to occupy the market. Placed with a contract have dominated the market
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was dominated in
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the first half of the
18
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18th
century in
england
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England
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and
wales
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Wales
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.The number started to decline after the year of 1918. Starting at around 78% and decreasing to
be
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equal
to
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the owned properties at 50% in 1971.
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,
The
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the
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number of people who had bought their own apartment or land
have
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has
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increased in the second half of the
18
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18th
century. We can see the gap between the two types of accommodation grow from
year
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1971
till
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to
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2011.

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • tenancy
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • proportion
  • residence
  • dwelling
  • shift
  • transition
  • migration
  • fluctuate
  • stabilize
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • decrease
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