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The line graph below shows the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares
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oil
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production
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 and
consumption
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 in China between 1982 and 2006
It is clear that
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 the data shown between 1982 and 2006 shows the most dramatic increase in the
consumption
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 rather than the
production
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 sector. From 1982 to 1990,
Oil
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Consumption
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 had a flat line graph with a total of 2
oil
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barrels
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 per
day
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.
However
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, from 1990 to 1994 the amount started to increase, and rapidly increased until the year
of
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2006, with the total amount of
consumption
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 reaching 6.5
Oil
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barrels
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 per
day
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.
In contrast
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,
oil
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production
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 in China showed only a modest upward trend. Between 1982 and 1986,
production
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 increased from 2 to 3 million
barrels
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 per
day
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, after which it continued to grow very slowly, reaching just over 3.5 million
barrels
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 per
day
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 in 2006. By 2006, the percentage of
oil
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consumption
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is
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 higher than
production
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 , with a difference of about 3
millions
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million
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oil
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barrels
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 per

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, production, consumption, barrels, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • oil production
  • oil consumption
  • gradual increase
  • surpass
  • overtake
  • reliance on imports
  • disparity
  • steady rise
  • growing gap
  • significant
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