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The line graph illustrates data from the Annual Energy Outlook 2008 regarding the consumption of different energy sources in the United States from 1980, with forecasts extending to 2030. Summarise the key trends by highlighting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where appropriate. Your response should be at least 150 words.

The line graph illustrates data from the Annual Energy Outlook 2008 regarding the consumption of different energy sources in the United States from 1980, with forecasts extending to 2030. Summarise the key trends by highlighting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where appropriate. Your response should be at least 150 words.
The line chart demonstrates the total
energy
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 utilisation of petrol & oil, coal, natural
gas
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, nuclear, solar/
wind
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, and
hydropower
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 in the USA between 1980 and 2030 from the Annual
Energy
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 Outlook 2008.
Overall
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, the trend shows that fossil fuels are always leading in
energy
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 use
year
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 by
year
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,
whereas
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 renewable
energy
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 is still at its lowest trend.
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From
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 1980 to 2025, the trend of fossil utilisation has fluctuated.
Additionally
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, the amount of
energy
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 consumption in 1980 from unrenewable resources stood at the highest position for petrol & oil, followed by natural
gas
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 and coal, which were 35
quadrillion
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units
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, 20
quadrillion
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units
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,
15
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and 15
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quadrillion
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units
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, respectively. In the projection
year
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, coal has increased dramatically rather than natural
gas
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, which are coal has increased by around 7
quadrillion
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units
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 and natural
gas
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 has remained stable at a quarter.
By contrast
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, renewable
energy
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such
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 as nuclear, solar/
wind
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, and
hydropower
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 has a slightly progress by the
year
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 than fossil. In 1980, the range of three resources was approximately 0%.
Afterwards
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Afterwards,
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 in 2005, the gap from solar/
wind
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 to
hydropower
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 is constant, but nuclear has a tiny fraction increase. In the future consumption, nuclear reached a trough of 3% approximately. Meanwhile, solar/
wind
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 gradually increases 2% approximately,
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 with
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hydropower
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hydropower,
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 that steadily annually.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, gas, wind, hydropower, year, quadrillion, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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