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The pie and bar charts below show the percentage of water consumption and use in Australia in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie and bar charts below show the percentage of water consumption and use in Australia in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie
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 and bar
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 give information about
water
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 consumption and the proportion of residential
water
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 use in Australia in 2004.
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,
it is clear that
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 a great amount of
water
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 was used by residents. In the same year, using
water
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 for the garden and bathroom were the main uses for residents. Looking more closely at the pie
chart
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, we can see that 70% of the
water
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 was allocated by residents.
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, only 6% of
water
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 was spent by the government. In business, the percentage of
water
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 consumption is almost the same as
industrial
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that of industry
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, with 10% and 11% respectively. A small minority amount of
water
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utilised
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 for other
.
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purposes.
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According to
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, a large quantity of
water
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 is applied for the bathroom and garden by citizens, with 27% and 28% respectively.
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, one in ten per cent of
water
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 is used for the kitchen. As for washing clothes, inhabitants spent 20% of the
water
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. Less than a fifth of
water
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 is used for toilets.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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