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The graph below shows the production of three forest industry products in a European country, namely timber, pulp and paper, from 1980 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below shows the production of three forest industry products in a European country, namely timber, pulp and paper, from 1980 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The line chart illustrates
amount
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the amount
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 of three industries from forest productions (
timber
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,
pulp
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, and paper) in European
nation
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nations
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, between 1980 to 2000. The units are measured in
million
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tons
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.
Overall
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, a glance at the line graph provided reveals a general upward trend in all productions, with some fluctuations in
pulp
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 and
timber
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 between 1985 to 1995. The output of
timber
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 and
pulp
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 experienced a similar pattern. The
timber
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 stood at 6
million
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tons
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 in 1980, the highest among all productions,
while
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 the
pulp
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 only 4,000,000
tons
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. The figure of
timber
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 noticeably surged by 1985, before
fell
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falling
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 dramatically to just over six
million
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tons
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 in 1995. From that year,
this
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 amount began to rise and reached
to
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apply
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nearly 8,000,000
tons
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 by the end of the period.
Similarly
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,
pulp
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it
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apply
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peaked at five
million
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tons
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 in 1985.
The
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In the
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 following years
the
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, the
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 rate of output saw
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a slightly
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slightly
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slight
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 decrease to over 4
million
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tons
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 in 1990, but rebounded
at
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to
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 almost 6,000,000
tons
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 in the
last
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 year, the lowest point.
By contrast
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, the paper production started at the
least
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lowest
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 point in 1980, approximately 3,000,000.
However
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, it grew striking to 10
million
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at the end
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 of the period, which was the popular production in European
country
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countries
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words timber, pulp, million, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production trends
  • output
  • timber
  • pulp
  • paper
  • gradually declining
  • depletion of resources
  • industrial focus
  • significant increase
  • growing demand
  • raw material
  • steady rise
  • stable market
  • finished products
  • consumer needs
  • surpassed
  • shift in priorities
  • renewable resources
  • sustainability
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