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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The images below
illustrates
Correct subject-verb agreement
illustrate
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 how the Ryemouth village has developed over the past 30 years.
Overall
Linking Words
, rural
region
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regions
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 and fishing-based
has
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areas have
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 turned into more
urbanized
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urbanised
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 and mainly focus on recreational activities
area
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apply
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. At present, the map expands the housing and
adding
Wrong verb form
adds
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 new
amenity
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amenities
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, completely
remove
Wrong verb form
removing
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 all
of
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apply
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farming and fishing activities.
Firstly
Linking Words
,
at
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on
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North
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the North
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 West side,
the
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apply
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housing and
the
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a
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 road from the main road to the West
has
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have been
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 added.
Secondly
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, the farmland and the forest park
has
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have
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been all
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all been
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 in
North
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the North
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 East. The farmland has changed to golf and
been
Verb problem
has become
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 bigger. The forest park has become to restaurant and
been
Wrong verb form
is
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 smaller.
Lastly
Linking Words
, at
West
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the West
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end
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End
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 the shops
has
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have
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 become
to
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apply
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the
Correct article usage
a
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 restaurant. On the other side, the
hotel
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 at the East end and the
the
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apply
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cafe opposite the
hotel
Use synonyms
has
Correct subject-verb agreement
have
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 not
change
Wrong verb form
changed
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but
Punctuation problem
, but
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 the carpark next to the
hotel
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 has been added. The fish market opposite the
hotel
Use synonyms
 has changed to
the
Correct article usage
an
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 apartment. At the sea, the fishing port has been removed.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hotel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • development
  • village
  • Ryemouth
  • 1995
  • present
  • houses
  • small school
  • residential areas
  • amenities
  • population
  • increased
  • growth
  • expansion
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