You should spend around 20 minutes on this task. The two bar charts show the proportion of 14-16-year-old students studying a modern foreign language in an English-Speaking country and the top three popular foreign languages Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

You should spend around 20 minutes on this task. The two bar charts show the proportion of 14-16-year-old students studying a modern foreign language in an English-Speaking country and the top three popular foreign languages Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for You should spend around 20 minutes on this task. The two bar charts show the proportion of 14-16-year-old students studying a modern foreign language in an English-Speaking country and the top three popular foreign languages Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The bar charts
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information about the proportion of 14 to
16-year old
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16-year-old
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students learning other common languages and their
percentage
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between 1984 and 2007.
Overall
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,
girls
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studied more than
boys
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in
this
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period of time, and
France
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French
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was the popular
language
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among these three languages. (
Fance
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French
, German, Spanish). In 1984,
girls
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studying
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percentage
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was about 60%,
while
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boys
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were
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was
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nearly 10
percentage
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lower
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points lower
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than
girls
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. (50%).
However
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, in 2007,
girls
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number decreased steadily to
same
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the same
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percentage
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as
boys
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number in 1984
.
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(50%).
Boys
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studying
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percentage
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apply
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in 2007
was
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went down gradually to 40%.
In
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the beginning of the period,
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language
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the language
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of France was at
the
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its
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peak, and
this
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proportion decreased in 2007 to 50%.
While
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German
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the German
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language
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stayed dominant, Spanish experienced
slight
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a slight
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increase from 5% to 20%.
This
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shows a clear shift in
language
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preferences among students over time. The data
also
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indicates that interest in French declined steadily,
while
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Spanish became increasingly attractive to young learners.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, girls, boys, language with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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