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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

Some people argue that girls and boys should be educated separately, while others think that it is more advantageous for children to study at the same school. What is your opinion?

Some people believe, male and female
childrens
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children
 should receive an equal
education
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 for their
future
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.
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, a gender basis
education
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 would lead a youth people to gain a successful
live
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 in the
future
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. In my opinion, every
individuals
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individual
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 has their own uniqueness, and
also
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, I believe every gender should have
a
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special treatment for their abilities
in
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 every
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education
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 level.
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 with,
male
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males
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is
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are
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 physically
more
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stronger than
female
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females
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. Their parents should
realize
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this
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 condition, and should lead them
in
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to
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 a suitable
education
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, football and baseball schools
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recomended
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recommended
 for young boys to improve their physical health.
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, a
physical
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 based
educations
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are
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 able to grow their leadership as a man in the
future
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,
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Although
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male
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males
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 are strong in physical,
female
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females
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as
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apply
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general
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has
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have
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 many advantages in critical thinking. They are strong in hospitality and
psycologicaly
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psychologically
 more mature than
male
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males
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.
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, more female students should receive
a
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apply
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math or even
a
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chemist
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 classes because they can understand better than
male
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males
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.
Furthermore
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, their parent should lead them to be a scientist
due to
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 their unique ability as a female.
Overall
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, as
a
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parents, they should distinguish their
childrens
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children's
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 abilities, and should give them a proper
education
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 for their
future
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.

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clarity
Your essay has a clear topic and you share ideas about boys and girls. Make your view clear from the start.
organization
Plan first. Make one opening line, 2-3 body parts each with one main idea, and a short ending that repeats your view.
grammar
Use easy grammar and spell right. Watch for s on nouns and make verbs fit.
examples
Give real examples when you make a point. Not only big ideas, use simple, clear examples.
content
The writer tries to discuss both sides and shows opinion.
structure
There are several ideas about how gender can affect learning.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Single-sex education
  • Gender stereotypes
  • Co-educational system
  • Social development
  • Gender equality
  • Psychological impacts
  • Collaborative skills
  • Diversity of opinions
  • Comprehensive social development
  • Equal access to resources
  • Educational environment
  • Distractions
  • Real-world scenarios
  • Academic advantages
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