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The diagrams below shows the changes of a town called Bridgetown in 1700 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below shows the changes of a town called Bridgetown in 1700 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagrams illustrate how the
town
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 of Bridgetown changed between 1700 and 2000.
Overall
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, the
town
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 expanded significantly over the 300 years, as farmland was transformed into new infrastructure,
such
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 as roads, railway
line
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lines
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, and
buildup
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built-up
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 areas,
while
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 some places, like
market
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marketplaces
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place
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,
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 woods, were maintained. In 1700, Bridgetown was relatively simple. The main features included a
market
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marketplace
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place
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 located in the
north
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northern
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 area, close to the woods and castle. Two roads connected through a bridge across the river.
In addition
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, farmland occupied the southern and western
places
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. In 2000, the
town
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 had undergone
significant
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 transformation. In the northern area, the castle was replaced by a school,
whereas
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 both the woods and a
market
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marketplace
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place
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 remained in the same
place
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. Notably, a railway line was built running east-west, across the river and past farmland. A new bypass was constructed to the south of the
town
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, circling the
buildingup
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building-up
 areas.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, place with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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