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The diagrams below shows the changes of a town called Bridgetown in 1700 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below shows the changes of a town called Bridgetown in 1700 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The two maps illustrate the main changes that have taken place
at
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 a town called Bridgetown between 1700 and 2000.
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, the town has been significantly developed over the period, showing a clear trend toward
modernization
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modernisation
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 and improved accessibility for visitors. The most notable change is the
reorganization
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reorganisation
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 of bypass and the addition of new transport facilities. The most significant changes concern the railway line and bypass. In 1700, there was
nothing
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no
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 transportation construction located
at
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 the east.
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, the railway line
have
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has
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 been
add
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added
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.
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, a new pass has been constructed, running from the south-west of the road across the river to the other
way
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side
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 of
road
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the road
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 on the eastern side. Regarding the facilities, the area for the west corner
have
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has
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 undergone a major
reorganization
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reorganisation
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. The west corner, originally located in the west, has been relocated to
buildup
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build-up
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 areas. The farmland areas,
along with
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 the bypass,
has
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have
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 been fragmented. The castle has
also
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 been changed to be
school
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a school
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, but the
market place
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marketplace
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 and forest in the east
remains
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remain
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 unchanged.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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