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The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1965, 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1965, 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the
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use
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 of four types of
transportations
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transportation
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 among people in the UK in 1965, 1985, and 2005. The units are measured in percentages.
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, the figures demonstrate noticeable fluctuations in
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the used
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used
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different
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vehicles
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 over time.
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,
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apply
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 Lorries and other commercial
vehicles
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 decreased in the final year. Notably, recreational
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was
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 the least popular in the UK,
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 Private cars were the most commonly used. Private cars experienced the highest
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 among individuals in the UK over the period given. In 1965, private cars accounted for just 40% and increased gradually to reach more than half in
final
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 year.
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 to public transport made up 25% in the first year but
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 number fell slightly by 5% to 20% in 1985, before
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 to 22% in 2005.
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recreational
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the recreational
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vehicles
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, usage has dropped from 15% in 1965 to 8% in 2005.
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, Lorries and other commercial
vehicles
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 comprised one-fifth in the first two decades and by 2005 declined to only 10%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words vehicles with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Proportion
  • Dominant
  • Fluctuations
  • Noticeable increase
  • Significantly decreased
  • Consistent rise
  • Continuous decline
  • Varied trends
  • Data illustrates
  • Common vehicle type
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