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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates the proportion of rented and owned houses in two European countries,
throught
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through
 the end of the 1910's and beginning of the
2010's
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2010s
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.
Household
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Households
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 in owned accommodation
was
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were
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in
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at
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the
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their
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 lowest point in 1918,
in
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compared to 2001.
On the other hand
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,
household
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households
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 in rented accommodation
was
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were
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in
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at
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the
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their
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 highest in the year 1918,
in contrast
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 to 2001. In the years between 1918 and 1961, the rented houses
were
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decreased over time from nearly 80% to almost 60%. Meanwhile, owned residential accommodation
have
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 increased by approximately 20 per cent. Both household types
become
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became
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 equal in 1971. From 1981 to 2001, rented housing facilities
fall
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fell
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 by roughly 10
percent
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per cent
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.
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, owned house properties
,
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apply
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showing
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have shown
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 a slight increase in 20 years by rising from 60% to almost 70 %. In 2011, acquired residential units
,
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 fell by almost 5%
,
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conversely
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, leased flats climbed up.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • owner-occupied
  • accommodation
  • households
  • percentage
  • sozio-economic factors
  • post-World War I
  • housing policies
  • economic challenges
  • affordability
  • societal norms
  • mortgage availability
  • economic prosperity
  • reversal
  • property prices
  • younger generations
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