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The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in different parts of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in different parts of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates the
percentage
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 of the population living in urban areas in different parts of the world, including the continents
Africa
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, Asia,
Europre
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Europe
, Latin
America
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, North
America
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, and the rest of the
universe
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world
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 in the years 1950, 2015, and 2050. From the statistics, we can clearly see that
in
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1950 was the lowest point in
Africa
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reaching
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, reaching
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 15, and the highest point was in North
America
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 with 64
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percentage
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per cent
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.
Moreover
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,
threre
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there
 was a sharp increase in 2015 in the whole world, Latin
America
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 showed a significant addition by 36
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percentage
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per cent
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.
Also
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, in 2050, there is a slight growth
in
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the
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apply
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worldwide. In conclusion, the trend demonstrates an upward
in
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trend in
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 the whole continent
,
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;
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Africa
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 has the lowest
percentage
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 in
the
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apply
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all three years.
In contrast
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, North
Africa
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 showed a slight climb
but
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, but
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 the highest figures.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, africa, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban areas
  • population density
  • economic development
  • historical urbanization
  • trends and outliers
  • urbanization levels
  • socio-economic implications
  • environmental impact
  • urban living
  • global trend
  • development strategies
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