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The given pie charts below illustrate a comparison of the total expenditures that residents of a European country spent on various goods and services in two different years: 1958 and 2008.

The given pie charts below illustrate a comparison of the total expenditures that residents of a European country spent on various goods and services in two different years: 1958 and 2008.
The chart compares the expenditure the
Europea
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 population spent on different goods and services in 1958 and 2008.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 most
money
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 was put into food in 1958,
while
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 in 2008, most
money
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 was spent on housing.
As
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apply
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a
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The
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 first chart shows the least
money
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 spent on luxury goods, with only 7%, and in travel, with only 8%.
Then
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, 13% of expenditure was put into entertainment. But 18% spent
in
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on
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 clothing, 22%
in
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on
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housing. And the people put
most
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the most
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money
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 in food
with
Punctuation problem
, with
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 32%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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