The diagram shows the different stages in the production of lead. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows the different stages in the production of lead. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram shows the different stages in the production of lead. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
process
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diagram illustrates the sequence of stages involved in the production of
lead
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.
Overall
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, the
process
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of producing
lead
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involves 8 stages, starting from extracting rock from the ground and ending with forming
into
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it into
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shape. At the beginning of the
process
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, the
lead
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along
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, along
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with other
elements
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elements,
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are
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is
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excavated and delivered to the factory by special lorries. As minerals are taken to the manufacturing, every element is crushed with
supplement
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supplements
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such
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as water, making
well-prepared
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it well-prepared
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for filtering. After crushing, the particles are poured into a large tank,
water
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and water
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and pine oil are
also
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added in order to filter them.
Then
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mixture
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the mixture
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is delivered to the cleaning
process
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so called refining, to remove unnecessary waste from the
lead
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.
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Then
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refined
lead
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is processed at a high temperature , approximately 1400 degrees. Having refined the
lead
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mixture, the
lead
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is separated
and
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, and
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other metals are thrown
to
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into
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the
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a
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special place and
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lead
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the lead
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itself.
At the end
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,
lead
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is cast into moulds

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words process, lead with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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