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The diagram shows the stages involved in the process of making leather goods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows the stages involved in the process of making leather goods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram provides a process description for making
leather
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 products
such
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 as handbags, shoes and children’s
plaything
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playthings
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. There are a total of nine stages to complete
this
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 process, starting from drying the animal
skin
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 and ending
it
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apply
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with the finished
leather
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 goods ready to be distributed.
Initially
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, the raw material must be dried before
delivering
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being
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 them to a
leather
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 cleaning factory by truck. When the dried
skin
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 has arrived, a
skin
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 cleaning process will occur by soaking the
skin
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 with a mix of water and lime. Before entering the second wash that contains a
vegetable based
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 substance, the
skin
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 will be pressed by a rolling machine to create a
more smooth
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smoother
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 and
flat
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flatter
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 surface. Afterwards, a metal roller is used to improve the
skin
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’s
overall
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 quality.
Subsequently
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, the now polished
skin
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 will be shipped by a vehicle to a
leather
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 goods production factory to transform
them
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it
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 into numerous useful items for consumers to use.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words leather, skin with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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