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Band 4

Group or team activities can teach more important skills for life than those activites which are done alone. Do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that group
work
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 can bring many important skills for the participants.
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 it is a commonly held belief that solo
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has
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 less effective than teamwork, there is
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 an argument
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 that. In my opinion, I believe that team labour can teach many advanced skills.
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engage
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work
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play
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 a crucial role in improving the quality of
work
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.
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, when the workers share their experiences and knowledge together can
be
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increase
the
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production
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 and
achieving
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 significant developments.
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, it encourages
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employments
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employees
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 to gain many skills
such
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 as solving
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problems and
broken
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the
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conflicts. What is more, take a decision and
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 the weakness points.
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, nations should support
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 trend and
allocating
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 initiatives to increase awareness about the great consequences of team
job
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work
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.
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, industrial systems in China, which rely on massive human
labours
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labour
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 to obtain
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success and
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developmets
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development
. Another point to consider, some people prefer to
work
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 in a calm atmosphere. It is possible to say that it generates creative ideas without any interruption.
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, actually they lack
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many benefits compared to others who
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 group business like
the
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empathy, trust and competition.
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, some individuals who
work
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 in remote
area
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areas
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 without partners
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 they lake of all
developments method
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development methods
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. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that group activities
offering
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offer
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 many advantages like resilience, creativity and adaptability,
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, fostering workers to do the best and increasing the generation process,
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 it can
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friendly
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a friendly
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 environment among the workers
,
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language
Check grammar and spelling to reduce mistakes that make the text hard to read.
structure
Start each paragraph with a clear topic sentence that states the main point.
content
Develop each idea with more detail and examples that are easy to see and easy to sport.
lexical
Use simple and exact words; avoid hard or long words that can confuse.
planning
Plan your writing before you start; write a short plan with your view and how you will argue it.
content
The essay shows a clear view and tries to compare group work and solo work.
organization
There is an overall attempt to have a conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • group work
  • teamwork
  • work together
  • share ideas
  • listen
  • speak clearly
  • discuss
  • decide
  • plan
  • solve problems
  • make decisions
  • meet deadlines
  • lead
  • follow
  • responsibility
  • task
  • role
  • feedback
  • respect
  • trust
  • empathy
  • conflict
  • resolve conflict
  • cooperation
  • support
  • life skills
  • school life
  • work life
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