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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the word. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons relevant

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the word. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons relevant
The six pie charts illustrate the proportion of
water
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 used for three
purposes
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(
Agriculture
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, Industrial and Domestic) in six parts of the world.
Overall
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,
water
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 is primarily used for
Agriculture
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 in Central
Asia
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, Southeast
Asia
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,
Africa
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 and South
America
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,
whereas
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 Europe and North
America
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use
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water
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 for Industrial
purposes
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.
To begin
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 , in developing countries, first and foremost ,
water
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 is used mostly for growing crops. In Central
Asia
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 and Southeast
Asia
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,
water
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 used for
agriculture
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 accounts for 88% and 81% respectively.
Similarly
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 , in
Africa
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 and South
America
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, it contains 84% and 71% respectively.
Secondly
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 , regarding domestic
use
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 , South
America
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,
Africa
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 and
Asia
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,
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 contribute 19%,9% and 7% respectively.
Thirdly
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 , the
water
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use
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 for industrial
purposes
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 is low for these countries , standing at 9% for
Africa
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, 5% in Central
Asia
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, 12% in South East
Asia
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 and 10% in South
America
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.
Nevertheless
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,
water
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 is extensively used in Industries in developed Nations. Europe ,
for instance
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,
use
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 53% of the total for the energy sector , 15% for societal
use
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 and 32% for
agriculture
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.
Lastly
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 , North
America
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use
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 almost half of its
water
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 for industrial
purposes
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, remaining 39% and 13% for
agriculture
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 and domestic
purposes
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.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, purposes, agriculture, asia, africa, america, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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