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The given line chart depicts the number of students who studied in universities abroad from 3 countries The US The UK and Australia over a period of 5 years from 2002 through 2007.

The given line chart depicts the number of students who studied in universities abroad from 3 countries The US The UK and Australia over a period of 5 years from 2002 through 2007.
The line chart
showes
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shows
 the
number
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 of
students
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 from three countries
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Australia
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, Australia
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, the
USA
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 and the UK
how
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who
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 studied in international universities over 5 years from 2002 to 2007. Generally, the
number
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 of
students
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 from the
USA
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were
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was
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 the highest
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; however
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however
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however,
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 there
is
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were
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 some fluctuations
and
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, and
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Australia
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 was the lowest.
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,
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apply
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 the UK showed
major
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a major
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 drop at some point.
To begin
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 with ,in 2002, the
number
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 of
the
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apply
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USA
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students
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were
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was
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 50000 and was the highest
between
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among
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 the other
tow
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two
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 countries.
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However
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this
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number
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 was
continously droping untill
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continuously dropping until
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year
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the year
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of
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apply
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2004.
Morover
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,
at
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in
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year
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the year
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of
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apply
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2004
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2004,
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 the
number
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 rose gradually and remained steady
50000
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at 50000
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untill
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until
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year
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the year
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of
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2007.
On the other hand
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, the UK started in 2002 with 40000
student
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students
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 and remained stable for 1
year
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.
Howerver
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However
, the
number
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 was decreasing gradually and reached almost 20000 in
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year
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the year
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of
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apply
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2007.
Additionally
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,
Australia
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was
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had
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 the lowest
in
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apply
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the
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apply
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number
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 of
the
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apply
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students
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10000
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, 10000
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but
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, but
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 stayed stable throughout the period from 2002 to 2007. In conclusion, the
number
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 of
students
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 from the three countries
were
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was
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 various throughout the period. The
USA
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 remained the highest,
while
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 those from
the
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Australia
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 were the lowest but steady throughout the period.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, australia, usa, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • increase
  • increased
  • increasing
  • rise
  • rose
  • rising
  • grow
  • grew
  • growing
  • up
  • fall
  • fell
  • falling
  • decrease
  • decreased
  • decreasing
  • down
  • upward
  • plateau
  • stable
  • stable
  • trend
  • trends
  • number
  • numbers
  • students
  • US
  • UK
  • Australia
  • country
  • countries
  • paraphrase
  • compare
  • contrast
  • overall
  • year
  • years
  • period
  • describe
  • show
  • patterns
  • growth
  • change
  • year-by-year
  • gradually
  • suddenly
  • significant
  • notable
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