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Child labour is considered to be one of the most serious problems on the planet. What are the reasons why children find themselves in child labour and can be done to tackle this issue ? poor financial condition force children t mwork for manage expences solution; Government should give subsidies, montly fixed funds and daily use goods such as books, free gym membership to children until they grow up and start doing work at pefect age strict rules

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Introduction
Undoubtedly,
child
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laour
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labour
 is always a significant menace in many nations
especially
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, especially
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developing
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in developing
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 and poor countries.
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Therefore
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Therefore,
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 a myriad of reasons are responsible for having
this
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tedency
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tendency
. So,
this
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 essay will discuss some primary factors of
this
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 and suggest certain points to deal with
this
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 threat.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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 with, one of the main
cause
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causes
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 of
this
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 trend is poor financial condition, which
pressure
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pressures
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 the
children
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 to
work
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at in
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in
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an
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 early
age
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 for
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a livlihood
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livlihood
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livelihood
.
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, in some cases, when there is limited or not enough source of income, or no employment,
then
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 adolescents are vulnerable or targeted to contribute
in
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to
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family
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the family
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 income.
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, in Nigeria and Ghana
young
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, young
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children
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 usually
starts
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start
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 working
in
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at
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 their early
age
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 and
assists
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assist
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 their family economically, because unemployment
level
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levels
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is
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are
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 high, wages are low
as compare
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compared
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 to ordinary expences of family
.
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expenses.
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Body paragraph 2
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, the lack of education and educational institutes beget the circumstances of
child
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 labour mainly in
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the country
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country side
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countryside
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area
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apply
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. To explain it, in some rural parts of a particular nation, schools are either
usually
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apply
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limited or
even
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apply
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not facilitated properly. Correspondingly, minors are more likely
pushed
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to be pushed
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 to
work
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and
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, and
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 parents feel that
work
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 is
more
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a more
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 productive use of their
children
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's time.
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, in poor villages of Bangladesh and
Pakisten
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Pakistan
, school-aged
children
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 as young as eight or ten years old
,
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apply
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 start working
due to
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 poor
education
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educational
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facility
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facilities
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 and family budget.
Body paragraph 3
The most viable solution for
this
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 issue is the introduction of strict
rule
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rules
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 against underage
work
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. To explain it, if
government
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the government
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 implements tough
regulation
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regulations
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 or
no
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a
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tolerance
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no-tolerance
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 policy,
then
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 parents and
employer
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employers
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 simultaneously would
aware
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be aware
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about
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of
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 the ramifications of
child
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 exploitation and would not allow youngsters to
work
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.
Such
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 as,
Child
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 Labour Prohibition and
Rerulation
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Regulation
 law in India,
Fair
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the Fair
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Work
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 Standard Law in the USA, and
Provincial
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the Provincial
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Laboiur
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Labour
 Law in
Canada
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Canada,
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does
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do
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 not allow
children
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 to
work
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 under 14 years.
Apart from
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this
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, young people should be subsidised by the local government. To simplify it, the council must build schools in rural areas and
facilitate with
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provide
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 skilled teacher, proper
eletricity
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electricity
 and water service,
even
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and even
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must
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apply
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give fixed monthly funds to
puipls
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people
 for their expenses until a certain
age
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. To
examplify
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exemplify
 it,
In
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in
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 Canada,
children
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recieve
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receive
 five
hundrad
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hundred
 dollars per month as pocket money through the government until
age
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 18, even study without cost.
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Hence
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Hence,
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 it
mitigate
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mitigates
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 the
illetracy
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illiteracy
 rate and
child
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 workforce in
country
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the country
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.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
although
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 numerous
reason
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reasons
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 are accountable for
this
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delimma
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dilemma
,
unstable
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an unstable
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 family budget is the prominent cause
which
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, which
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 can be solved through implementing strict laws and providing all basic requirements
along with
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 education to the younger generation.

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structure
Work on making the plan clear. Every part should link to the task: state a cause, then give a solution, and finish with a clear idea.
language
cohesion
Keep one idea per paragraph. Use simple link words to connect ideas smoothly (and, but, so, also, then).
content
Give more exact examples or data to back your points, and be careful with facts and spellings.
content
The essay tries to cover both causes and ways to solve the problem.
structure
There is an introduction and a conclusion, which shows a plan.
content
Some examples are used, which helps to support points.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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