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Band 2

Students from the UK,US and Australia studying in other countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the number of educators who
learning
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are learning
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 in other countries
such
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as
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in
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UK
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the UK
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,
US
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the US
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, and Australia. In general,
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this
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these
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stats
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statistics
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 consist of several changes from 2002 to 2007.
For instance
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, the
amount
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The number
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 of students from the US saw a significant growth
at the end
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 of the year.
While
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those
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Those
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 who were studying
from
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in
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 the UK experienced a
descent
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decline
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 in 2007.
Nevetheless
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Nonetheless
,
learnes
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learners
who
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Those who
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 are exploring from
the
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apply
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Australia remained unchanged. Observing the trend graph in detail, the number of students from the US commenced with a decrease from 2002 to 2004, constituting
among
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45,000. But by 2007,
this
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 indication culminated with a rise over a
3 years
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3-year
 period, which was 50,000.
According to
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the UnitedStates
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UnitedStates
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United States
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, the
quantity
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number
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 of scholars
maintainedthe
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remained
same
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the same
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level
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apply
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over a
year
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one-year
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 period, making
up30,000
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up 30,000
.
However
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, the figure continued to decline between 28,000 to 21,000 from 2003 to the end of the year.
Furthermore
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, the count of students dropped slightly to 7,000 in 2004. But the number of learners increased a little between 2004 and 2005, representing 10,000.
Thus
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, in the end,
this
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 indication did not change, accounting for a steady 10,000.

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task response
Give a clear start. Say what the graph shows in one line. Then tell the main changes as an overview. Then write one paragraph for each country with clear, true data.
coherence cohesion
Link ideas well. Use easy joining words like 'and', 'but', 'also', 'however', 'then'. Keep ideas in the same order.
language
Check form. Use 'the UK', 'the US', 'Australia'. Use 'studying' not 'learning'. Use past tense for change.
structure
Keep sentences short. Do not put too many ideas in one line. Make data correct and not mixed.
data accuracy
Make sure data is exact from the graph. If a number is given, use it correctly.
data points
Some data points are given to show trends (for example, 45,000 and 50,000).
comparative attempt
There is an attempt to compare countries.
effort
The writer tries to show what happened over time.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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