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The given line graph illustrates the travel to and form the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by the UK residents in the year 1999.

The given line graph illustrates the travel to and form the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by the UK residents in the year 1999.
The data provides information on the
amount
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number
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 of
UK
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 nationals visiting abroad and Foreigners travelling to the
UK
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 between the time period (1979 - 1999), and the most preferred destinations of travel by
the
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UK
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 citizens in the year 1999.
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Overall
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Overall,
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 it can be observed that there was a rise in the figures of tourists who travelled to and
fro
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from the
UK
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 over the period.
Additionally
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 , France and Spain were the most popular locations visited by people of the
UK
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 in
comparsion
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comparison
 to the other countries mentioned. There was
significant
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a significant
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 rise in the number of
UK
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 population visiting abroad in the year 1999 than in 1979 . The figure was almost 12
million
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 at the
beggining
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beginning
which
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, which
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 rose
upto
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up to
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 55
million
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 (1999).
However
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 ,
slightly
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a slightly
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less
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lower
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 rise in the
amount
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number
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 of foreign nationals visiting the
UK
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 was observed in 1999 compared to 1979, which was around 28
million
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 and 10
million
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 respectively. In terms of the most visited countries in 1999, Spain and France had the highest tourists from the
UK
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 . Almost 12
million
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 travelled to France and 9
million
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 to Spain.
Meanwhile
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 the total figure for
UK
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 residents who visited the USA , Greece and Turkey was less than 5
million
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 for all
the
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three countries.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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