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Some people think that government funding for school should be spent on science subjects rather than on other subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that the government should spend more money on
science
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 subject tools in schools,
instead
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 of other
subjects
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 like sports, geography, history
etc
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. Personally, I agree that
science
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 is important
,
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 I believe all
subjects
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 should be treated the same and equal.
Science
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 helps a country grow.
Subjects
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 like physics, biology, and chemistry teach students how to solve problems. Scientists help people by finding cures, making new things, and fixing problems. If the government gives money to
science
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, the country can get better.
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, some people say other
subjects
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 are
also
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 important.
Subjects
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 like mathematics, graphic design and history help students understand mathematical problems, learn how to design, and learn about different
historicals
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historical
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.
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periods.
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 In conclusion, I concur that
science
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 is important and should get government support. But I
also
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 think other
subjects
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 should receive funding too. A good education should help all students, not just those who are interested in
science
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task response
Be clear what you think at once. State your view in the first line.
coherence
Make a clear plan. Say 2 or 3 ideas with reason, and end with a short view.
content
Give real, simple examples to show how science can help a country.
grammar
Fix small word mistakes like 'historicals' and check noun and verb form.
coherence
Use smoother links like 'also', 'but', 'and' to show how ideas go with each other.
content
The main idea that science needs money and that all subjects must get some money is clear.
structure
You show both sides in simple way.
conclusion
The end holds the view again.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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