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Band 4.5

In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industry and construction. What measures could be taken to prevent this?

The issue of the
air
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 and
water
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 quality
which
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, which
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 comes from both
industry
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 and
construction
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construction,
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 is happening in most developing countries. I believe that the effective measures are setting
the
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apply
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strict regulations and building the appropriate facilities to control the pollution from
industry
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 and construction.
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,
industry
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 plays a significant role in most developing and developed countries
,
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;
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 modest approaches allow the
industry
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 not only
improve
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to improve
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their
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its
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 advancement, but
also
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decrease
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to decrease
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the
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apply
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pollution.
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, there’s a technology which
provide
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provides
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 a system that can recycle the
waste
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wastewater
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water
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 or
air
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, following
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. Following
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 the treatment, the treated
water
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 or
air
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 will be distributed in the field or stream. The treated materials are cleaned by some filters or chemicals.
This
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 facility can
decline
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reduce
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the
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apply
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pollution to the lowest level.
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, before releasing the polluted
water
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 or
air
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,
industry
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 and construction companies have to
examine
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be examined
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 by the governments. The governments can develop
a
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apply
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relatively strict laws to regulate them,
they
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and they
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 are allowed to release the
emission
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emissions
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 only if
those
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the
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water
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 or
air
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are
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is
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 in
the
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a
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status
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state
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 that
meet
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meets
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 the standards. In order to
improving
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improve
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 the quality of
water
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 or
air
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, those constructions can be built in a sustainable
developing
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development
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 means.
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, the companies can choose the
environmental
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environmentally
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 friendly components of constructions, dedicating to lowest the destruction to
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this
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the
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 environment. Using the materials that can be recycled or which are harmless to
this
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 planet. In conclusion, in order to solve the problems of
quality
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the quality
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 of
water
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 or
air
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, I suggest that the governments should regulate the
industry
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 strictly, the companies should build some facilities to treat the
emission
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emissions
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 properly and
utilize
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utilise
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 the correct ingredients that benefit the environment.

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structure
Make a plan. Use three parts: intro, body, and conclusion. Put one idea in each paragraph.
task
State your view in the intro and keep it to the end. Say what you will talk about.
coherence
Use clear links. Words like first, next, then, and finally help the reader follow.
grammar
Keep grammar simple. Use short sentences and correct order. Check common mistakes.
content
Give clear examples. For each measure, say how it helps to cut air and water pollution.
lexical
Use right word. Avoid long or hard words. Use common words in top 100.
strength
Idea to cut pollution is clear.
strength
Some useful ideas like rules and new tech.
structure
Intro and conclusion are present.
Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pollution control regulations
  • emissions
  • discharges
  • green technology incentives
  • environmentally friendly practices
  • renewable energy sources
  • sustainable materials
  • waste management policies
  • recycling processes
  • environmental monitoring
  • compliance with environmental standards
  • public awareness campaigns
  • environmental protection
  • infrastructure upgrades
  • modern building techniques
  • international environmental organizations
  • air and water quality management
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