The graph below shows the changes in the birth rates for women in 6 different age groups in the UK from 1973 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the changes in the birth rates for women in 6 different age groups in the UK from 1973 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows the changes in the birth rates for women in 6 different age groups in the UK from 1973 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph above demonstrates the number of
births
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per 1000 women in 6 age groups in the UK from 1973 to 2008.
Overall
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, the chart shows a decrease in the rate in the ages 20-25, under 20 and 40 and over.
In contrast
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, the figure shows an increase in birth numbers between ages 30-35 and 35-19,
while
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the rate in the age group 25-29 fluctuated. As illustrated in the chart , in 1973,
female
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females
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aged 20-25 had a little over 120
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per 100 people ;
this
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number steadily fell to 90
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per 1000 people in 2008.
Likewise
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, underaged women's birth rates decreased from 60 per 1000 in 1973 to nearly half at 30
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per 100 people in 2008.
Moreover
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, griatric women aged 40 and above birth rates lowered steadily from 20 per 1000 in 1973 to almost 15 in 2008.
On the other hand
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,
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in their 30s were more encouraged to have children. In the early 30s (30-35),the rate increased from 70 per 1000 in 1973 to a little over 81 per 1000 in 2008. Meanwhile,
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females
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in their late 30s (35-39) show an upward trend as well
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, increasing
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from 40 per 1000 in 1973 to 60 per 1000 in 2008.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words births with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • birth rate
  • demographic trends
  • age group
  • fluctuations
  • increasing/decreasing trend
  • steady
  • peak
  • low point
  • childbearing age
  • socio-economic factors
  • family planning
  • cultural shifts
  • population demographics
  • fertility rate
  • policy changes
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