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Band 4

You recently had a meal in a restaurant, but you were not happy with the service that you received. Write a letter to the manager of the restaurant. In your letter * tell him/her why you had chosen this restaurant for your meal * explain why you were not happy with the service you received. * say what you would like the manager to do about this.

Dear
sir
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Sir
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, I hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
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 letter
reagarding
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regarding
 my disappointment
on
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with
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recent
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my recent
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 visit
at
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to
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 your restaurant. I saw some positive
review
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reviews
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 on
google
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Google
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 about your place
which
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, which
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 brought my
intrest
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interest
 to try your food. Even, I
watched
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even watched
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 some viral social media reels of your signature cuisines. Actually, the
over all
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overall
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 experience at your eatery place was
exellent
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excellent
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such
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, such
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 as
food
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the food
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 was delicious
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as
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, as
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 well as the
atmostphere
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atmosphere
 was
also
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 decent. My colleagues and I were really impressed
from
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by
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live
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the live
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 band
which
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, which
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 was outstanding. One thing, we did not like during our
dinnner
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dinner
is
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was that
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 the behaviour of server was not polite, she was taking our order in
rush
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a rush
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. I would like to suggest
you that
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that you
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 add more trained staff, so that
can
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you can
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 improve the service quality. I hope you will take prompt action on
this
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 concern. Yours
Sincerely
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sincerely
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, Jatin.

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task response
State all points clearly: why you chose the place, what happened, and what you want done. Keep each idea in one part.
coherence
Use one idea per paragraph. Start a new paragraph when you shift to a new point.
grammar
Check spell and grammar, and use simple words.
tone
Keep a polite and calm tone in the letter.
format
Use a normal letter format with date, greeting, body, and closing.
content
The letter shows why you chose the restaurant and what you want.
tone
The tone is polite and respectful for a formal letter.
structure
You give a clear request for action.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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