The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevent.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevent.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevent.
The column depicts the proportion of Australian citizens
that
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usually exercise,
categorized
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by gender and age groups, in 2010. On the whole, it is apparent that young men and
matured
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women took the lead,
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that for the elderly in both breeds and male adults were the least
to
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likely to
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do physical activity.
According to
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the column, nearly 55% of boys
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aging from
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15 to 24 years old
,
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did exercise regularly, standing at the highest point among men's data. The figure for masculine adults and
elderly
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the elderly
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was around 45%, except for the group of
35-to-45-year-old
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35-to 45-year-olds
, which was under 40%. In terms of the other gender, there
was
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over
a
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half of female adults, ranging from 35 to 64 years old, doing physical
avtivity
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activity
often.
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, less than 50% of teenagers
aging
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from 15 to 34 years old and
oldsters
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older adults
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who were
feminine
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female
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exercised regularly,
in
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with
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which
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the oldest age group
took
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taking
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the lowest ranking.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • physical activity
  • age groups
  • engagement
  • demographics
  • decline
  • gender gap
  • regular exercise
  • younger ages
  • middle age
  • older age
  • highest and lowest participation
  • comparative analysis
  • trends
  • illustrate
  • significantly
  • evident
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