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Water is a natural resources that should be free. Government should ban the sale of bottled water. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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inevitable
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an inevitable
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 fact that living things on
an
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earth
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Earth
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 cannot live without
the
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apply
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water
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. Some believe that drinkable
water
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 must be free, and
authorization
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authorisation
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 should
prohibited
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prohibit
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 the sales of
water
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bottle
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bottles
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. I strongly disagree with the notion because of
water
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 will waste and
easily available
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the easy availability
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 of
water
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bottle
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bottles
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, and will discuss in detail in the following paragraphs.
To begin
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water
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 is the precious resources that need to
preserve
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be preserved
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it
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apply
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for upcoming generations. To specify, individuals would not
valued
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value
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 the
water
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 because of free access
of
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to
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 the
water
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. They will not give
the
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importance to the
water
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, the way it has been given now
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due
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 to the price tag.
As a result
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, scarcity of
the
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drinkable
water
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. Another reason is
that
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the
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,
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 cost of infrastructure to maintain the filters and clean the drinkable resources.
Furthermore
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, banning the
water
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bottle
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 might
be affected
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affect
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the economic
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economic
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economy
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 of the nations
as well as
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individuals
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individuals'
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life
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lives
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. To explain it, many people rely on
a
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bottled
water
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, because of
the
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its
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 hygiene and
easily accessible
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easy accessibility
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 in the market. People always considered
a
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bottled
water
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 safe and secure
due to
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 their
policy
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policies
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 and
machineries
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machinery
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.
For example
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,
When
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when
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 a flood or any
harmful
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other harmful
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 disaster
happened
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happens
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then
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 most
of
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apply
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authorities are highly
depended
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dependent
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 on
water
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bottle
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bottles
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. It may
also
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contanimate
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contaminate
pipeline
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the pipeline
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due to
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 flood.
To sum up
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with
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apply
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,
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water
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a water
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bottle
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is
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plays
crucial
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a crucial
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 role
to maintain
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in maintaining
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water
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 dignity and
keep
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keeping
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 alive the value of
water
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 in the eyes of
public
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the public
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, so for that I believe that
government
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the government
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 should
helped
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help
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the
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such
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 companies and maintain the
water
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 values for
an upcoming
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future
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 generations.

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planning
Plan your essay before you write. Use four paragraphs: intro, two body parts, and a conclusion. Each body paragraph should have a clear point and evidence.
content
Give more real examples and explain how they show your view. Make each idea full.
language
Check grammar and verb form. Use simple, clear sentences.
cohesion
Use clear linking words to show order and place. Use words like first, next, then, but, because.
task response
You state your view clearly in the essay.
coherence
Some linking phrases are used to connect ideas.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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