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Band 4

Natural resources such as oil, forests, and fresh water are being consumed at an alarming rate. What problems does this cause? How can we solve these problems?

It is
a
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 undeniable fact that natural
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resources consumptions
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resource consumption
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are
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 all over the world. Some
resources
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such
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, such
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 as drinkable water, living areas for animals and
oil
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oil,
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 are consumed at excessive
level
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levels
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.
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, depletion of non-renewable energy and loss of biodiversity can be triggered
,
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however
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 there are certain solutions
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such
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 as
usage
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the usage
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 of alternative
resources
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 and enforcing policies
as well as
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laws
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 by the government. The foremost problem caused by the exaggerate use of
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natural
resources
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 can lead to
reduction
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a reduction
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 in non-renewable sources
such
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 as fossil fuels , minerals. It can exhaust renewable
resources
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 like forests , freshwater beyond their ability to regenerate.Another problem is that
,
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 the extinction of animals
,
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plants and
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and plants
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distrupt
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disrupts
 the ecosystem by reducing chains.
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, cars and many
transportations
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transportation
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vechile
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vehicles
 are run on fossil fuels
such
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petrol
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as petrol
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 and diesel, which
releases
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release
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 greenhouse gases to create heat in the atmosphere. Possible solutions to these problems would be to reduce the amount of pollution being created and
imposing
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 strict
laws
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. If people start to use renewable energy for their daily
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usage,
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then
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 it can reduce
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this
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these
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 massive problems and
it
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gives
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a
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time to heal the earth. Another possible
solutions
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solution
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 is
that
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,
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introducing
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the
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strict
laws
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 and policies against the big companies by the authorisations.
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, spread awareness to the public about the
resources
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.
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, Karnataka imposed strict
laws
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 against the contractors and companies
who
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 were involved in deforestation of forests in 2023.
To sum up
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,
consumptions
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consumption
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 of oils and other
resources
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are
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is
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 at high risk
which
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, which
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lead
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leads
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 to scarcity, but with the right strategies
and
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 government can solve any issues if it is not taken
as
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a
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granted.

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organization
Plan your writing. Make a short start, then two or three body parts, then a short end.
structure
Each paragraph should have one main idea with a clear point at the start.
language
Check spelling and grammar. Use simple words and correct mistakes like 'distrupt' and 'vechile'.
vocabulary
Choose precise words for cause and effect, like pollution and loss of life, not vague phrases.
examples
Give softer but real examples from life or data to back up your point, such as real rules or programs.
content
The essay shows a good idea that we use many natural resources and this can harm the world.
example
It tries to give a real example (Karnataka) to show a point.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • non-renewable resources
  • economic instability
  • water shortages
  • agricultural production
  • deforestation
  • biodiversity
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • global warming
  • sustainable management
  • conservation
  • alternative energy
  • afforestation
  • reforestation
  • water conservation
  • responsible consumption
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