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The graph below shows the changes in food consumption by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the changes in food consumption by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph
illustreats
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illustrates
 the
cheanging
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changing
 over time the period in food
consumption
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 by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010.
Linking Words
overall
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, the meat and fish
consumption
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have
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has
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 increased over time the period and
have
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has
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 the
haighest
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highest
 numbers of
using
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users
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.
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However
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 the
consumption
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 of
using
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apply
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the
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apply
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salt has decreased over
the
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time. The meat
consumption
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 has
grew
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grown
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 until
the
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apply
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2010 by using 100
grams
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 of meat per person every week,
while
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 the fish
has
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consumption has
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 climbed until
90s
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the 90s
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 by using 700
grams
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.
Then
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 the
consumption
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 display to 600 in 1995. From 1995 until
2010
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2010,
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 the
consumption
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 of fish has increased
dramaticly
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dramatically
 and
get
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reached
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 to
the
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apply
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peak. The
consumption
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 of salt has
drop
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dropped
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 sharply from 1985 to 2010,
by using
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from
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 500
grams
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 per person
for
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per
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each
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apply
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week
until
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to
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 200
grams
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 per person.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Food consumption trends
  • Per capita
  • Staple foods
  • Diet diversification
  • Protein-rich meals
  • Economic development
  • Stable or declining trend
  • Nutritional transition
  • Dietary shifts
  • Global averages
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