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Band 2.5

Many university students live with their families, while others live away from home because their universities are in different places. What are the advantages and disadvantages both situations.

There is no denying the fact that
academic
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an academic
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dgree
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degree
 is
importing
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important
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 for our careers
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. .while
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.
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While
while
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 it is
commonly
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a commonly
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 held belief that sometimes we need to be far from home
town
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apply
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to be sure that we hold stable jobs or
dgrees
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degrees
. On the one hand,these days
countrys
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countries
supports
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support
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 individuals to study abroad by offering them a monthly
money
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allowance
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 and
apartment
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an apartment
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.
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in
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In
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 other words,some
countrys
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countries
 do not have strong
universitys
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universities
,so students have to go far from their families and
facing
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face
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problems
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such
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 as
,
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apply
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homesickness and money
problems
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.
For example
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,less daily support from the family can
do
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cause
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drowbacks
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setbacks
 to the students
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also
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, also
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,
some time
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sometimes
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 visa
problems
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 can
leads
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lead
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 them to stay
more
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apply
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longer on the other side of the world.
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,some students
dose
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do
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 not have the
strong
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strength
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 to be far away from their parents.
nevertheless
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,they
does
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do
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 not know how to cook or clean clothes.It is
also
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 possible to say that some people are sick and they have to go to
hospital
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the hospital
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 monthly or whenever they need it.
study
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Studying
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 abroad is
great
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a great
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 thing
but
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, but
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 not always for the right people
,some
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. Some
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 of them go there to be alone or away from home
problems
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 and
whan
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when
 they face
it
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it,
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 they realise how hard it is. In conclusion, there is no easy answer to
this
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 question.
However
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,
i
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I
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 tend to believe that
study
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studying
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 abroad has both advantages and disadvantages
and
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, and
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 it is shown
on
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in
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 the person it self.

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planning
Plan before you write. Start with a short intro that states both sides. Then write a paragraph for each side and finish with a clear view.
editing
Use simple, clear words. Make short sentences. Use linking words like and, but, also to join ideas.
development
Give reasons for each point. Use a simple example to show your idea.
structure
Two sides are shown with on the one hand and on the other hand.
conclusion
There is a clear end sentence (conclusion).
idea
Some ideas fit the topic of study away.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • independence
  • emotional support
  • safe environment
  • focus
  • money
  • relationships
  • decisions
  • responsibilities
  • meet new people
  • social skills
  • financial stress
  • lonely
  • new city
  • friends
  • family
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