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Science can now offer people a life expectancy of close to one hundred years or ‎even more. Some people view it in a positive light, but others believe it creates ‎some problems. Discuss both views, and give your own opinion.

Science is one of the
way
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let
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to let
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 our
society
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 keep
forward
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moving forward
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,
also
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 if we want to go to
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the next
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 stage, we must
sacrified
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sacrifice
 something. That
the
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 reason
when
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why
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 some
people
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heard
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 that we
invent
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have invented
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 some new things
are
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that are
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 good for
society
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, some
people
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 feel happy
and
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 some feel concerned. For the
people
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they
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, they
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 feel happy, because they think that
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if the invention can
boot
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boost
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 up our
society
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, that
mean
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means
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 we can have more better life quality and we may find a lot of new things
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such
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, such
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 as space exploration or increase our age to
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a higher
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 level. For the
people
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they
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who
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 feel concerned, because they know that the invention is
also
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accompany
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accompanied
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by disadvantage
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disadvantage
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disadvantages
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,
such
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 as
cut
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 down
the
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apply
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tree
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trees
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 to earn more land to build the technological centre to keep
invent
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inventing
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 new things. That will make some animals
extinct
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extinct,
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then
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 our next generation will not have
chance
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 to watch the real animal, they only watch it through the internet,
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which
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 can give
the
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a
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 good learning environment to study, that why some
people
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 think it will
creates
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create
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 some problems.
As a result
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, science is a tool for our
society
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keep
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to keep
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go
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going
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 forward. It
depands
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depends
 on how we
use
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 it, if we
use
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for
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to
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 improve our life
quality
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quality,
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the
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then
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 we will have a positive
light
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impact
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, but if we
use
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 it in the wrong way, that
also
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accompany
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accompanies
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 some problems
to
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in
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 our
society
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, so we need to
use
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 it in
the
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a
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 good way and
use
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 it
smart
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smartly
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.

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planning
Plan your answer first. Make one main view and follow it to end.
coherence
Use clear links to join ideas. Simple words like and, but, also, however help a lot.
language
Fix grammar. Use correct verb forms and plural words. Read aloud to find mistakes.
content
Add clear examples with detail. Name a real effect of science and explain.
structure
End with a strong conclusion that repeats your view.
content
The essay tries to cover both sides of the issue.
structure
It gives an own view at the end.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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