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The table below shows the percentage of adults in urban and rural areas who took part in four free time activities in 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information and compare where relevant, by selecting and reporting the key features.

The table below shows the percentage of adults in urban and rural areas who took part in four free time activities in 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information and compare where relevant, by selecting and reporting the key features.
The table illustrates the proportion of free time activities by adults in urban and rural
areas
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 from 1990 to 2010.
Overall
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, in urban
areas
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, activities
such
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 as
reading-animated play-playing-
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reading, animated play, and photography
photography
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 increased,
while
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 reading and
photography
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 in rural
areas
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has
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have
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 the same pattern.
On the other hand
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, people in rural
areas
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 were more
like
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likely
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 to
reading
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read
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 and
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take photography
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photography
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photographs
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.
To begin
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 with, reading was the most popular
activities
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activity
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 in urban
area
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areas
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 in 1990, and it continued to grow by 78 per cent in 2010.
Although
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 people were playing
outdoor
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outdoors
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 accounted slight decrease at
end
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the end
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 of the period, animated play
was
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apply
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remained the same as the initial period.
Lastly
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,
photography
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 became more popular in 2010,
increased
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increasing
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 more than three times from the beginning.
Rural
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The rural
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 area has
identical
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an identical
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 pattern with
urban
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the urban
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 area, reading
acivity
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activity
 and
photography
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 experienced
slight
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a slight
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 increase in the
last
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 ten years.
However
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, animated play plummeted to 14 per cent and playing remained the same
in
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over
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ten
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a
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years
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ten-year
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 period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words areas, photography with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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