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Band 4

fossli fuels such as coal , oil, and natural gas are the main energy sources in many countries the use of renewable energy like wind and solar power is being encouraged . do you think this is a positive or neagtive development

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 recent times , in many
coutries
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countries
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 of renewable
energy
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 has been a topic of interest,
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 some might hold the belief that
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 renewable
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 is a positive development . I hold the view that using renewable
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 brings many negative
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. The following essay will shed light on these viewpoints. On the one hand , it is essential to acknowledge the significant benefits associated with
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positive
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 development .A crucial consideration is that improving environment healthy and fresh eir , which highlight that reduce carbon and enhance well being , environment healthy plays an important role in it helping people and improve cardiovascular fit ness ,
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 it bring improve boot mood , nowadays many countries the
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 of renewable
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 for examble wind and solar or water it is one of the most efficient way to individuals fresh eir reduce diseases for examble
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 as diabetes , heart diseases and obesity .
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, another important point to
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 using
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 vehicles and public
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transportation
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 as an efficient way to save time and money .
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 , it is crucial to examine the opposing viewpoint that
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energy
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bring
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 many negative
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environmental impacts
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. A key factor to explore is that high initial cost and requires large areas of land . which highlights
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 need government to invest in cost and the lack of skilled workers and advanced technology .
nowadays
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 many countries, the
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 of renewable
energy
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 like wind and solar power is being encouraged, it plays a critical role in environmental health and
moredern lifes
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modern lives
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 has many negative high initial cost and dependence on weather conditions .

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structure
Make your stance clear in the first paragraph and keep it through the essay.
content
Present one main idea in each paragraph and add short, real examples.
grammar
Use simple grammar: check subject-verb, article use, and plural forms.
cohesion
Use linking words to show how ideas relate, such as 'also', 'but', 'however', 'for example', 'therefore'.
content
An effort to discuss both sides of the issue.
content
Some link to health and cost shows topic awareness.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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