Fish pie production line The diagrams give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

Fish pie production line The diagrams give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
IELTS Writing Task Chart for Fish pie production line The diagrams give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The pictorial illustration depicts the stages of the frozen fish pie.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the process by which frozen fish pie is manufactured is a multistep process, which consists of three main stages beginning with the collection of
potatoes
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and
salmons
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salmon
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and ending with
store
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storage
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. At the beginning, on one
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hand
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hand,
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potatoes
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which are not
old
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older
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then
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than
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one month and
on the other
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hand
Punctuation problem
hand,
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fresh salmon not
old more
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older
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then
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than
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12 hours are collected .
Then
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in a
seperate
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separate
section
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potatoes
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, potatoes
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are being cleaned, peeled and sliced.
Afterthat
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After that
, the sliced
potatoes
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are boiled and
clilled
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chilled
for a
while
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.
Thereafter
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, they pass them through a stoce and store
in
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them in
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a
boul
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bowl
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.
On the other
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hand
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hand,
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subsequently
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, salmon are marinated
by
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in
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lemon juice and salt and
then
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stem
Verb problem
baked
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on
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in
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ovens.
Afterthat
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After that
, skin
are
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is
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being removed
hand
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and inspected
them
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apply
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by
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the inspactor
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inspactor
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inspector
for the dedicated work. At
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last
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last,
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sources and
peos
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peers
are prepared.
Then
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in the second stage everything got
wroped
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wrapped
and
preserve
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preserved
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in
refrigerator
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the refrigerator
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for
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to
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leting
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let
them
frozen
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freeze
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.
Finaly
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Finally
, the products are ready for dispatch.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words potatoes, hand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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