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The maps show the changes in the village of Wells-on- the Water in the UK between 1985 and 2010.

The maps show the changes in the village of Wells-on- the Water in the UK between 1985 and 2010.
The two maps
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the development in the village of Wells-on-the-Water from 1985 to 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the village experienced significant changes, with more facilities. The village became more
urbanized
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urbanised
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 and modern. It consisted of a large farmland with
view
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a view
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buildings
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of buildings
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. The farmland,
in
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on
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 the Northern
side
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, was transformed into
residential
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a residential
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 area with some shops and
road
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a road
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.
While
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 the mansion gardens located at the
center
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centre
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 of the map remained, the mansion house was
the
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apply
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substitute
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 for a care home. Concerning its left
side
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, the old factory
surrounding
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surrounded
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 by rods, was replaced by luxury flats.
In
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On
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 the southern
side
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,
while
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 the post office remained unchanged, the large park was located next
the
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to the
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 post office from the left
instead
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 of a small
farm house
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farmhouse
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.
In contrast
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, the farmland
in
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on
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 the right
side
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,
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apply
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 was developed
to
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into
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 housing and expanded the main
rode
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road
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. The river wells remained unchanged
but
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, but
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 in 2010 had one
bride
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bridge
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 in the bottom part.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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