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The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps
demonstarte
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demonstrate
 changes that had been in the
village
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 of Stokeford between 1930 and 2010.
Overall
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, the
village
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 took place
in
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on
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 the right
side
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 of the river Stoke and
entrance
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the entrance
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 through
bridge
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the bridge
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.  There were
post
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a post
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 office and
school
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a school
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 that extended. In
1930
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1930,
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at
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in
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 the
village
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 was only one
road
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, and
at
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on
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 the north-west
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side
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side,
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 there was farmland. By
2010
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2010,
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 from main
road
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made
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had made
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 the other little roads, and
instead
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 of farmland
was
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were
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 built
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houses
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apply
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with their own path.
At
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In
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 the middle of the map
in
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, in
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1930
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1930,
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 was
primary
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a primary
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 school. In 2010,
school
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the school
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 was completed with
two
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 large buildings.
At
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On
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 the left
side
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from
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of
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 the
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road
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road,
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 there
were
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was
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post
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a post
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 office and
two
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 shops. By the year 2010,
post
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the post
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 office did not experience changes,
while
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instead
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 of shops were built
houses
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 with
own
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their own
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path
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paths
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.
Verb problem
were built.
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 In 1930, in the
village
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 was
immense
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an immense
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 garden with only one tree and
two
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fir-tree
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fir trees
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,
also
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 a large house. In 2010, the garden was decreased in size and cut down
tree
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apply
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.
To
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Two
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 large
house
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apply
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were built
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in two
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two
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a
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 buildings
and
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house and
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become
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became
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retirement
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a retirement
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 home.
In addition
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, to garden was
maked path
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made
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 with
houses
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.
In
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On
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 the south
side
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 was farmland too
but
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, but
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,
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apply
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 by 2010,
were built
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apply
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a
round shape
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round-shaped
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road
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with
Verb problem
was built with
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houses
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 and till the end of
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road
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the road
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 were built
homes
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apply
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "instead".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village, side, road, houses, two with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • village
  • maps
  • Stokeford
  • 1930
  • 2010
  • main features
  • overview
  • changes
  • similarities
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