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The chart below shows the different level of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.

The chart below shows the different level of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.
The chart illustrates five different levels of post-school qualifications,
such
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 as Master’s degree, Postgraduate
Diploma
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, Bachelor’s degree, Undergraduate
Diploma
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, and Skilled Vocational
Diploma
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, held by
men
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 and women in Australia in 1999.
Overall
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, the Skilled Vocational
Diploma
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 showed the highest percentage among
men
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 but the lowest among women. For females, the majority obtained their qualifications from undergraduate studies, at approximately 70%,
while
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 most
men
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 received their diplomas in skilled vocational education, at nearly 90%. When we look at the Postgraduate
Diploma
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, the gap between
men
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 and women was almost half.
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, for the Bachelor’s degree, both genders had similar percentages, with only about a 5% difference between them.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words diploma, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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