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Writing Samples
Band 3

The following map details a town now and a proposed future layout.

The maps compare the layout of a
town
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 in
a
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its
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 present form with its proposed plan.
Overall
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, the
town
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 will undergo a major transformation, mainly through the construction of new roads to enhance connectivity for residents. At present, an airfield occupies the northwest part of the area, connected to a road named A2.
This
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 road currently contains a single roundabout to the southwest of the airfield, leading to the
town
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center
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centre
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 and crossing a vertical railway line. A gas station is situated at the southwest end of the junction where the railway meets a horizontal street. In the future, the airfield will be replaced by an industrial estate
,
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apply
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 with a direct connection to the railway. A larger roundabout is planned to be built
in
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at
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 the intersection near the gas station.
Although
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 the
town
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 centre will
remained
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remain
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 unchanged, another road called A4 is expected to run southwards, offering an alternative route from the
town
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 centre to the industrial estate.
Additionally
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, a highway will be constructed directly east of the
town
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 centre to
further
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 improve transport links.

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task response
Start with a clear view of the map. Tell what is now and what is later. Use simple steps.
coherence
Use more link words to show how ideas connect, e.g., first, next, also, but, in addition.
grammar
Check small grammar errors like will remained -> will remain, and use 'at' for places when needed.
structure
Give a short end line to sum up the change, not just one more point. Have a brief finish.
content
There is a clear main idea about a big change in the town.
organization
The essay describes both current and future plans with some detail.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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