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some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects.others believe it is more importantto give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Different universities
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variety
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 of beliefs
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how
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 "perfect education" for their students looks like.
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 as should their students focus only on
specialized
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disciplins
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disciplines
, or should
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 expand their worldview and learn diverse subjects
.
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 I agree with the second opinion
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 and will try to explain my thoughts
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. But
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, why do some universities
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contrary
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 opinion? Well,
i
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 think the case is that they believe that the only purpose of higher education is to release
qualificated
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qualified
 professionals that will start their career
immediatly
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immediately
. After all, sufficient general knowledge about the world was already given to pupils in school. So the time they spend in university can be focused
for
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 studying essential information and skills
about
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 their future jobs. Though from my
persrective
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perspective
,
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 type of view downplays the role of
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higher education. Can
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 place that
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 give versatile knowledge be really called "alma mater"? What's the difference between university and professional courses in
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 case? Enough skills for work can be given in the second one. But
university
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 should provide more than that. It is a place where students educate themselves not only as future employers, but as
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intellegent
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intelligent
 person. They won't have
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opportunity
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 in their
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besides
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 studenthood, when they can learn with qualified professors about philosophy, history, literature, etc. When they
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 by peers and can discuss these topics with them. So, even though some educational systems tend to prefer the first option, where they focus only on main subjects,
i
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 don't think
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 is the right
choise
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choice
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structure
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content
You show a clear view that you agree with the second option.
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You talk about the benefit of learning many subjects, not only work topics.
structure
There is an attempt to keep to the topic and to discuss higher education.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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