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The bar chart shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the USA, Canada, the UK and Japan in 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the USA, Canada, the UK and Japan in 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides the spending allocation in the USA, Canada,
The
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 UK and Japan for five categories in the year
of
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2009. In general, housing took the highest cost,
while
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 health care and clothing
was
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were
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 the minimum expenditure.
However
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, the spending
of
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on
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food
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 was comparable to transportation in four countries Housing in the United States reached the peak level of spending
which
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 was over 25%, meanwhile in Canada it was nearly 20%.
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 with the expenditure
of
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on
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 health care and clothing
which
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, which
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 were the
least
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lowest
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, in the United Kingdom
the
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, the
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 spending
of
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on
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 health reached the lowest level among other
countries
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countries,
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that
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 was around 2,5%.
Food
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 and transportation took almost similar spending levels
,
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;
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 it took over 20% cost for
food
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 in Japan,
on the other
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hand
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hand,
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food
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 spending in the United States was around 14%. Canada reached the highest level of transportation spending

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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