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The chart shows the proportion of survey respondents that showed interest in particular sports in three different years in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the proportion of survey respondents that showed interest in particular sports in three different years in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the proportion of
people
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that
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who
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 were interested in several sports in the UK for three years.
Overall
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,
football
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 became the most popular sport in 1995, 2000 and 2005, and
people
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that
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who
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 were interested in other sports remained fluctuating. In
1995
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1995,
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football
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 took over 40% as it was the highest number, followed by snooker and tennis
and
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 the least popular was swimming with only around 24%. The number of
people
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that
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who
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 were interested in
football
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 increased slightly in 2000, it was around 42,5%, and the proportion of swimming rose sharply by 32%.
In contrast
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 with
rugby
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rugby,
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that
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which
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 became the least popular sport by only 20%.
for
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 the year
of
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apply
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2005
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2005,
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football
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 was still the most popular sport
where
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, where
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the
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a
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 growth was 45%
, in
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. In
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 the lower stage was swimming and golf
that
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apply
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reached similar positions
with
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, with
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 around 27%. Tennis was in the least position, as there was no change in the number of
people
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that
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who
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 were interested compared to five years ago.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, football with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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