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The average number of hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different countries in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given bar chart shows information about
number
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the number
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 of
hours
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 taught by each professor in four different countries in 2001. The teachers are divided into three sections
primary
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: primary
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, lower secondary and upper secondary. It is evident that
,
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 upper secondary courses were the longest time
was
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dedicated in almost all nations,
whereas
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,
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primary was the least.
Firstly
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, upper secondary
lecures
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lectures
 were most taught in all countries
exept
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except
 one. In
USA
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the USA
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 , almost 1100
hours
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coursework
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of coursework
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was
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were
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 performed. Followed by Spain, which had around 200
less
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fewer
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hours
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 than the Americans.
Although
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,
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 upper secondary was not the maximum in Ireland, around 750
hours
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 were still taught.
Secondly
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,all countries had
least
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the least
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 number of
teachings
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teachers
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 in primary sections. Japan, Spain and Ireland all had only 600
hours
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 of primary studies.
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, around two hundred and fifty
hours
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 of
lessions
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lessons
 were
more
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apply
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taught in
USA
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the USA
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.
Similar
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A similar
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 trend was seen for lower secondary, USA being the highest with around 1000
hours
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,
while
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 Japan and Spain
being
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were
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lowest
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the lowest
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.

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language
Fix many small grammar errors. Use 'hours taught', 'upper secondary', 'lower secondary', and 'primary' correctly. Use plurals right and place commas and full stops well.
coherence
Link ideas with simple joins like and, but, also, however. Group facts for each country and level first, then do compare.
task
Keep to chart data. Name all four countries and all three levels. Check the exact numbers and keep them steady in each part.
content
The essay shows a try to compare four places and to use data.
structure
The writer uses numbers to back up some points.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual hours of teaching
  • teaching workload
  • educational systems
  • teacher-student ratio
  • significantly
  • slightly
  • noticeably
  • gap
  • highest/lowest number of hours
  • compare
  • contrast
  • reflect
  • variations
  • distribution of teaching hours
  • average
  • respectively
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