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The table below shows the proportion of the workforce who are women and the proportion of managers who are women in five different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the proportion of the workforce who are women and the proportion of managers who are women in five different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The aforementioned table chart provides information about the rate of
women
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employees
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 and managers in five nations.
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, Japan had the highest rate of
women
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 workforce. Where the United States and Australia came after. Despite the fact that Japan has a high rate of
women
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employees
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, it has another face where
this
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number
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 plummets in
women
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 managers,
similarly
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 to countries like Egypt
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 and Sri Lanka. Japan accounted for around 48% of its workers who are
women
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, where that
number
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 dropped to 17% in management fields.
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, American female
employees
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 constituted around 46%.
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number
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 in managing positions declined to 43%. Australia
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, has about 42% of its jobs occupied by
women
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, and around 43% of its managers are
women
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.
Nonetheless
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, Egypt has 20%of its occupations taken by
women
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, where that
number
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 fell to 12% in the administration fields.
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 with Sri Lanka, where it reached 41% of
women
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employees
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, and 9% of the administrators are
women
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, employees, number with synonyms.
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