The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
The pie graphs illustrate the number of British learners who had the ability to use foreign
languages
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besides
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English at one university in England in 2000 and 2010. In general, more and more students were able to speak other
languages
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in
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the university.
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, Spanish was the most popular language which the students learned. It is
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that the percentage of
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Spanish spoken was the highest and increased from 30% to 35%.
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, people in the university who were able to use another language and 2 other
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rose by 5% in 2000 and
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ten
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later. In terms of other
languages
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spoken, the number of students who can speak German
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to English remained unchanged
10
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% in the years given.
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, the figure for French spoken only went down by 5%. And
also
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, the learners who
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were just
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ablt
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able
to use English decreased from 20% to 10% in the time shown.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
Vocabulary: Replace the words languages with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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