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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

A building company is planning to build new houses on some land near where you live, and has asked the public for comments. Write a letter to the manager of the building company. In your letter: say how you heard about the building company’s plan give your opinion of the plan say what you hope the building company will do

Dear
sir
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Sir
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/
madam
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Madam
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, I am writing
this
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 letter to express my opinion about building new houses in my area. I recently heard about
this
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protect
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from my parents in the morning. I find it is interesting and creative plan.
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, I would like to let you know that
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protect
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product
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 has both
advantage
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advantages
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 and
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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. On the
postive
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positive
 side, it can
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 as an effective way to solve the housing problem and provide work for people
around
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in
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area
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the area
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.
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, one problem that I have encountered is that the roads here are very narrow
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 traffic
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congestion
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happens
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 frequently.
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, one important thing about the issue
air
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of air
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 and noise pollution. And from my perspective, the main reason for
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 is that the loss of green space could
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 affect the
enviroment
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environment
 and quality of
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life, so I suggest that your company consider keeping a small park and
plant
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planting
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 more trees and flowers around new houses
in for
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so that
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 people have
enought
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enough
 space to relax and help maintain the beauty of our place. Please let me know if you have any questions or need any
further
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 information. Sincerely, Mr Toan.

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task response
The letter has some good points but it is hard to read. Try three small paragraphs: intro (how you heard), body (your views), and end (what you want).
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words like and, but, so to join ideas. Break long lines into short ones. Check spelling and grammar to fixed.
greeting closing
The letter has a real greeting and a closing.
content
You show a view on the plan and the good and bad sides.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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