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The bar chart shows the percentage of small , medium, large companies which used social media for business purposes between 2012 to 2016.

The bar chart shows the percentage of small , medium, large companies which used social media for business purposes between 2012 to 2016.
The bar
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 below provides key information on how the
business
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 has a smart social media
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 2012 to 2016. It includes three parts. The three businesses are small,
medium
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 and large. The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, the highest number of parts was shown in the large
business
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,
while
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 the lowest number of parts was shown
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 the
medium
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business
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. Both of them have
significant
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 shift. On the one hand, in terms of the highest change,
according to
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 the chart below, the highest level was improved in the
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large
business
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, from 2012 to 2014, at almost 80%.
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However
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 the lowest level was determined in 2013, at almost 55%.
On the other hand
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, in terms of the lowest change,
according to
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 the given data, the lowest ratio was provided in the
medium
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business
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, in 2015, at about 30%.
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, the highest ratio was shown in the
medium
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business
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 in 2016, at almost 55%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words business, medium with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital landscape
  • Market competition
  • Customer engagement strategies
  • Adoption rate
  • Comparative growth
  • Fluctuations
  • Entities
  • Proportions
  • Embracing
  • Predicts
  • Trends
  • Uptake rates
  • Substantial
  • Decline
  • Interpretations
  • Engagement
  • Noticeable
  • Implications
  • Consistently
  • Summarizing
  • Reflecting
  • Implications
  • Predicting
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