You have just enrolled in a 12 week English class, but have found that you have a family problem and you will have to return home. Write to the school. In your letter 􀁸 Explain what has happened 􀁸 Request a refund 􀁸 Ask whether you will be able to return at a later date

Dear Sir, I am writing

this

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letter to request

you

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apply

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a favour about the cancellation of my

12 week

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12-week

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English course that I enrolled in, which will start

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next week. Please allow me to elaborate

behind

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my urgent cancellation. It was all of a sudden,

When

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when

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I got a call from my brother informing

that

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me that

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our father

got into

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had been in

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an accident. The Ambulance,

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Nevertheless

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nevertheless

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, rushed to the hospital with my father for

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apply

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emergency care.

Foruntately

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Fortunately

They

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there

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was

not

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apply

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any

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major issue

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;

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however

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, there was a small fracture on

left

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the left

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leg.

Due to

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this

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, he has

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apply

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difficulty

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while

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apply

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walking. Since my mother is too old to take care of him, I need to return to my hometown so that I can be there for him to provide

assist

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assistance

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. I would like to request my refund that I paid for the class.

Unfortuanlely

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Unfortunately

, I would not be able to attend the class because of

this

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issue, and

also

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I required

emergency

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an emergency

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fund for my father's treatment and medicines.

Thus

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would be greatful if you

able

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are able

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to refund my amount smoothly without any

further

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delay. To be honest, I would like to join the class after returning from my hometown because I want to improve my communication skills

which

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, which

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would help me to excel in my

carrer

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career

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, I heard your

Instuition

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institution

is one of the best in the town in terms

spoken

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of spoken

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english

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English

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course

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courses

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. So,

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would be

wise

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a wise

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choice to select your school for the learning of

language

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a language

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. I hope to get a prompt response in

this

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matter from you.

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, an open line of communication in

this

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matter would be highly appreciated Yours sincerely, IK

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Nov 11, 2025

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grammar

Many long sentences make the note hard to read. Break lines and use short sentences.

spelling

Fix spelling and common word use. Use simple words like 'unfortunately', 'hospital', 'care' and 'money'.

structure

Use one idea per paragraph. First paragraph say what happened, second ask for a refund, third ask if you can return later.

tone

Be polite. Use phrases like 'I would like to' and 'could you please' to ask.

grammar

Check small errors with verbs: 'they were' instead of 'they was'.

format

Use full stops and commas to separate ideas and to end thoughts.

content

The letter has a clear aim and asks for a refund.

format

Greeting and closing are present.

content

The writer shows he wants to join the class again in the future.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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10
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
31
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

279 words

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