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The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of three sectors, which are
agriculture
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, manufacturing, and business and financial services
to
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 the United Kingdom
economy
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 in the
last
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 century.
Overall
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, the economic contribution from the
agriculture
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 and manufacturing sectors decreased over time,
while
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 the business and financial services
sector
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 increased significantly. In 1900, the highest percentage of economic incomes in the UK came from farming by almost 50% and just below that was the industrial
sector
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 by about 45%. The
agriculture
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sector
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 percentage was increased to achieve more than half of the UK
economy
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,
while
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 manufacturing decreased slightly to 44% in 1950. From 1950 to 2000, the manufacturing continued to decline gradually to nearly 18%, but the
agriculture
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 decreased dramatically to the lowest
sector
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 by less than 5%. In 1900, the business and financial services
sector
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 incomes in the United Kingdom
economy
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 were the lowest at below 5%. From 1900 to 1975, the growth rose by more than double to become the second-highest
sector
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 by almost 20%. In the
last
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 25 years, it has become the largest
sector
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 that contributed to the United Kingdom's
economy
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, by just above 30%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words agriculture, economy, sector with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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